Yolanda and Renee of Write, Edit, Publish have put forth their first writing challenge for this year, based around Valentine’s Day. The challenge is to write a fiction or non-fiction piece in 1000 words or less. So without further ado, let’s get right into it.
John couldn’t believe it was Valentine’s Day already. How time flew.
It was one of the most important days of his life. The day when he and Marnie had decided to take the next step in their relationship.
John adjusted his hat and walked along the same street where he had taken so many moonlit strolls over the years, hand in hand with Marnie. He smiled. The city had changed so much over the years, but it was still beautiful at night, pulsing with life and vitality. The both of them had had many wild nights together, painting the town red.
They were inseparable, always with their arms around each other. Her sing song laughter echoed in the evening air, replaced by ecstatic moans as the night went on. His thick, stubby fingers would comb through her dark tresses, caress her pearlescent skin, trace the contours of her sanguine lips. She in turn would let her spidery fingers roam over his rough form, from his scruffy brown hair to the slight bulge of his gut. The passion they shared could scorch the world, but that wasn’t all that they had.
Marnie was one of the few people, perhaps the only one, that truly understood John. The both of them could spend hours engaged in the most idle conversation, or simply watching the world go by in complete silence. They were content to simply exist together, two bodies and minds joined as one.
John’s footsteps grew a little heavier as he walked away from the city, towards the small hill that lay on its outskirts. He paused before the iron gates at the foot of the hill and took out a small package from his coat’s inner pocket. He opened the package carefully, removing the wrappings to reveal a single, blood-red rose. With a sigh, John walked through the gates.
He hadn’t expected his romance with Marnie to end as abruptly as it had. Though perhaps he should have. They had become too reckless, drawn too much attention to themselves. With the number of people that had gone missing in the wake of their nightly escapades, it was only a matter of time before a hunter showed up in town. John and Marnie hadn’t been concerned. They thought they could handle things. But they were wrong. The hunter was cleverer than they had anticipated. He laid the perfect trap, and they fell for it.
John knelt down and placed the rose on top of an unmarked gravestone. Marnie had made the ultimate sacrifice so that John could escape. This was where she rested now, though he wondered if she’d found any peace. He patted the stone and started to walk away. All good things came to an end, he thought.
His jaw clenched.
But this wasn’t supposed to.
John walked out of the cemetery and back to the city, running a finger along the bite marks on his neck, still as fresh as they were 150 years ago. Eternity was too long a time to be spent alone.
Word Count: 509
Someone whose love is as eternal as their promises. Truly romantic, and to this romantic a very sad ending.
Thank you.
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And thank you. 😌
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Wow! I really don’t know what to say. Your story is so good. Is he a vampire? Is this a paranormal story. If so, you have done a wonderful job. I could have cried at the ending.
Shalom,
Patricia
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He is indeed a vampire. A lonely one now, but I suppose he has all the time in the world to work through his grief…
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And thank you for the kind words. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story!
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A vampire love – how quaint. I’m almost ready to forgive John for their ‘red nights’. Almost…
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Nice touch at the end with John running his fingers over the bite marks on his neck as he runs off. If people hadn’t worked out it was a paranormal tale, that gives us enough! Love the sentiments expressed by John and his grief over Marnie’s death. A Valentine’s tale with a difference!
Thank you so much for joining us again and with such a wonderful entry!
Denise 🙂
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Thank you Denise!
I wanted to keep the paranormal aspect very subtle, leaving hints without actually saying ‘vampire’. Glad that worked as intended!
I’m eagerly awaiting the next challenge now!
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A vampire or werewolf, how scary. True…how eternity is too long to spend alone. I wondered when you mentioned the hunter but didn’t connect it until the very end. Great tale.
Nancy
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Thank you Nancy!
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Nice touch about the bite marks and the ending! Eternity is too long to spend alone…a paranormal Valentine’s story, kept me guessing right till the end, Well done! Enjoyed it much.
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Thanks, Nilanjana!
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I read almost to the end before realising John was a vampire. And a heartbroken one at that.
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Hi Arpan:
I knew you would give us a unique story, and one of love, sacrifice, and loss is perfection. That it’s a Vampire tale is even better. I foresee a man or is that vampire, on a mission of vengeance and maybe even a quest to find a way to bring his eternal love back to life. Those vamps always find a way. 🙂
I truly enjoyed this. It’s perfect for the WEP Valentine Challenge, thanks for sharing it with us!
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Thanks so much, Yolanda.
The initial idea was to tell a simple tale of love forever lost. Somewhere along the way, it morphed into a tale of vampire lovers. It seemed like just the thing to give the story some extra oomph.
So glad you enjoyed it!
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Oooh, that was an awesome twist and a fabulous ending!
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Thanks so much! 🙂
Glad you enjoyed it.
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I don’t really do vampire stuff but this was subtle enough and well written enough to keep me reading until the end. Well done.
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Thanks!
As soon as I had the idea to write a vampire story, I knew I did NOT want to a typical vampire romance tale. Nothing that should remind anyone of Twilight. Ever.
Glad that worked out!
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Wow. Very nicely done! I liked how it didn’t give me “Twilight” vibes one bit!
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Awesome!
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Ah, I really liked this. Subtle, sad, romantic. I appreciate an eternal vampire romance with violence more so than the puppy and kittens trash people have made popular. Anyway, great story!
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Thanks so much!
I definitely wanted to steer clear of ‘puppy’ vampires, but kept the horror factor minimal in keeping with the Valentine’s theme.
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Cool ending. And I love the way you kept the horror element lower key considering it was for Valentine’s Day. Excellent job. You write well.
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Thank you, Robyn!
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Huge Congratulations on your well deserved win.
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Thanks so much! 😀
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CONGRATS on your win, Arpan! Very well deserved!
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Thanks Nilanjana! This was quite unexpected! 😀
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